Birthday story

Birthday story

Pencil and paper
Overview
Using this Resource
Connecting to the Curriculum
Marking Student Responses
This task is about writing captions for a story board.
Questions/Instructions
There are 4 pictures that tell a story. Imagine that you are writing a story book.

  1. Cut out the pictures.
  2. Put the pictures into an order that tells a story.
  3. Put a page number on each picture to show the order.
  4. Write under each picture to tell the story.
  5. When you have finished, put the pages in order and staple them together.
Page __________
Page __________
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Page __________
Page __________
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Task administration: 
Equipment
Scissors; stapler.
  • This NEMP task requires students to cut out four pictures and write a story to go with them.
  • NOTE: These images have been redrawn.
Level:
2
Curriculum info: 
English, Creating meaning, Writing
Keywords: 
nemp, sequence, narrative, storyboards
Description of task: 
For this NEMP task students cut out and order a sequence of pictures and write captions to tell a story.
Answers/responses: 
Scoring:  

Y4 (10/98)

 
2 marks
1 mark
0 mark

3 marks
2 marks
1 mark
0 mark

3 marks
2 marks
1 mark
0 mark

3 marks
2 marks
1 mark
0 mark

Text related to picture:
always
sometimes
rarely/never
Logical flow:
excellent
very good
good
poor
Plot development:
excellent
very good
good
poor
Interest: e.g., humour, tragedy, moral
very high
quite high
some
little or none
Overall score:
9-11
6-8
3-5
0-2

 
78%
19%
3%
 
39%
26%
25%
10%
 
29%
35%
23%
13%
 
23%
36%
26%
15%
 
38%
30%
21%
11%
 
Commentary: About two-thirds of year 4 students handled this story-telling task quite well, with 38% handling it very well. The parallel task for year 8 students was A Tale of Two Donkeys.

 

Examples

HIGH RANGE


Page 1

Ring, Ring… Oh hello you just got a preset here young man would you like to come and get it.
 
Page 2

Oh cool a box of chocolate and a birthday card.

 

Page 3

Hey! Wheres my chocolate.

 
Page 4

yum, yum……

 

 

HIGH RANGE
1. The telephone rang and it was tom's Grandma she said she was going to come around to give tom's Birthday present. 3. When the dog saw the chocolate he started eating the chocolate when tom wasn't looking.
2. The door bell rang and it was Grandma and Grandad they sat down at the table and he opened the present it was chocolate. 4. When tom terned around he saw that the chocolate was gone then he new the dog had got it because he looked sick.

 

MID RANGE
1. it was Peaters birthday he has some chocelate Just then the phone ring. 1. One day a boy got a packet of choclet. The boys dog wanted some The boy didn't let The dog have any.
2. it was Peates friend he was coming over. 2. The dog was very sad becaus he wanted some choclet but he didn't get any.
3. when Peater got back the choclate was gone Peater cryed the door bell rang it was Jason with a toy cow 3. When the boy went away the dog tolk all of the choclet. When the boy came back it was gone
4. here you go Peater the cow is magik and right that monemt he stopet (stopped) crying.

The end

 4. The phone started to ring the boy went to get it. It was his mum saying hie.

The end