Cola
- generate content that is relevant to the task
| Y8 (09/1998) | |
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Date:
yes, correct place
yes, elsewhere
Sender's address:
yes, correct place
yes, elsewhere
Recipient's address:
yes, correct place
yes, elsewhere
Appropriate salutation
Appropriateness of language:
always
mostly
sometimes
rarely/never
Requests key information:
yes, clearly
vaguely
no
Appropriateness closing salutation
Name/signature of sender:
full
partial
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28%
16%
33%
25%
47%
12%
72%
29%
42%
23%
6%
70%
24%
6%
74%
70%
18%
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Commentary:
Like their year 4 counterparts, year 8 students often omitted return address information. A much higher proportion, however, included appropriate salutations and indicated who was sending the letter.
Examples
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street address suburb city Sender Address Coca Cola Company P.O. Box 641, Newmarket, Auckland 7th September, 2017 Dear Sir/Madam, My name is ____ and I am in need of some information on how Coca Cola is made for a ____ Intermediate, school project based on soft drinks. I would be very appreciative if you could send me some information.
Thank,you,
Yours sincerely,
Name
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street address
suburb
city
Coca Cola Company P.O. Box 641 Newmarket Auckland 1.9.17 Dear Sir/Madame I am doing a class project on Coke.I was wondering, if there would be any possibility if you would be able to send me some information on how coke is made. My address is above.
Kind regards
Name
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name
Intermediate School
street address
suburb
city
Coca cola company P.O. Box 641 New Market Auckland 4 September 2017 Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to find out how coke is made for a school project.I would be much obliged if you would send me some information.
Your sincerely,
Name
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| Mid Range | |
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24.8.17
Coca Cola Company
P.O BOX 641
New Market, Auckland
Dear Coke I am doing a project on Coca Cola and I would most appeciate if you sent me out information on where they make Coke and how long it take's and any other information that you think is neccacery for a project. ThanksName |
Coca Cola Company
P.O.Box 641
Newmarket, Auckland
Dear Manager,
Our school is doing a project on how coke is made we were thinging you could help us if you can send our information to:
school
street address
city
Thanks.
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Po box 641
New market
Auckland
31/8/17
To the manager of Coca Cola in Auckland, I am doing a school project on your product and would like to know if you could send me some information that might be help full please send this information to street address suburb. Yours senserly name |
name
street address
suburb, city, postcode
New Zealand
24th August, 2017
To the Manager,My name is ____ and I am 13years old. I am at name School, Year 8. I am doing a project for General Studies on Coke: the ingredients; how it is made & what equipment is necessary.
Please could you send me some imformation.
Your devoted drinker, Name |