Thank you letter
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Overview
Using this Resource
Connecting to the Curriculum
Marking Student Responses
Further Resources
This task is about writing a letter.
Read the letter. Imagine that your class received this letter. Write a letter to the Playground Trust, thanking them for the donation.
Task administration:
This is a NEMP trend task. This task was trialled in both 1998 and 2002. The data for both years has been included under the "Marking Student Responses" tab.
This task can be completed with pen and paper or online (with NO auto-marking).
Levels:
2, 4
Curriculum info:
Key Competencies:
Keywords:
Description of task:
For this NEMP task students write a thank you letter to the Playground Trust. The letter is assessed on letter conventions, content, and language.
Curriculum Links:
Links to the Literacy Learning Progressions for Writing:
This resource provides one source of evidence of students’ ability to:
- choose effective content, language, and text structure
as described in the Literacy Learning Progressions for Writing at: http://www.literacyprogressions.tki.org.nz/The-Structure-of-the-Progressions.
Learning Progression Frameworks
This resource can provide evidence of learning associated with within the Writing Learning Progressions Frameworks.
Read more about the Learning Progressions Frameworks.Answers/responses:
| Scoring: | Y4 (10/2002)* | Y8 (09/2002)* | |
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1 mark |
Return address: at top of letter |
3% (3%) | 12% (20%) |
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2 marks or 1 mark |
Date: full, in correct place partial or in incorrect place |
5% (2%) 2% (5%) |
22% (21%) 8% (10%) |
|
2 marks or 1 mark |
Address of Trust: full, in correct place partial or in incorrect place |
0% (0%) 1% (0%) |
4% (2%) 2% (2%) |
|
2 marks or 1 mark |
Opening saluation: Dear Mr Fit/Dear Sir Dear Secretary/Playground Trust |
21% (13%) 30% (29%) |
46% (33%) 39% (45%) |
|
1 mark 1 mark 1 mark 1 mark 1 mark |
Form and language: highly appropriate moderately appropriate final salutation name or signature of sender on behalf of |
4% (3%) 50% (49%) 31% (37%) 50% (51%) 4% (4%) |
37% (29%) 53% (65%) 78% (75%) 68% (62%) 23% (24%) |
|
1 mark 1 mark 1 mark 1 mark 1 mark |
Content of letter: clear 'thank you' money will be spent on playground children will be involved in the planning some ideas for playground expressing excitement about new playground |
95% (88%) 55% (56%) 5% (2%) 17% (13%) 36% (37%) |
97% (97%) 77% (75%) 19% (16%) 31% (21%) 53% (48%) |
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Total score: 10-17 7-9 4-6 0-3 |
2% (2%) 17% (15%) 42% (41%) 39% (42%) |
26% (25%) 44% (33%) 23% (34%) 7% (8%) |
* 1998 data is in brackets.
Commentary:
Perhaps because thank you letters from Year 4 students would often be collected and sent with a covering letter by the teacher, Year 4 students followed business letter conventions much less fully than did Year 8 students. Only about 25 percent of Year 8 students included a good proportion of desirable elements.
| Year 8 – High range | Year 8 – Mid range |
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| Year 4 – High Range | Year 4 – Mid Range |
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