I think - I feel - I dream - I hope

I think - I feel - I dream - I hope

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Overview
Using this Resource
Connecting to the Curriculum
Marking Student Responses
Further Resources
This task is about writing a poem from a personal viewpoint.

Question 1Change answer

Everyone is special.
We think special things.
We feel special things.
We dream special things.
And we hope special things.

Make up a short poem called "Me". 

In your poem write about yourself – your own special self.

Task administration: 
This task can be completed with pencil and paper or online.
Levels:
2, 4
Curriculum info: 
English, Creating meaning, Writing
Key Competencies: 
Using language, symbols, and texts
Keywords: 
nemp, poetry, personal viewpoint
Description of task: 
For this NEMP task students read a poem about 'Me' and then write a poem about their own 'special self'.
Curriculum Links: 
This resource can be used to help to identify students’ ability to create texts to meet the writing demands of the New Zealand Curriculum.
 
Links to the Literacy Learning Progressions for Writing:
This resource helps to identify students’ ability to:
  • choose effective content, language, and text structure
as described in the Literacy Learning Progressions for Writing at: http://www.literacyprogressions.tki.org.nz/The-Structure-of-the-Progressions.
Learning Progression Frameworks
This resource can provide evidence of learning associated with
Creating texts for literary purposes, set 3
Creating texts for literary purposes, sets 4-5
Writing meaningful text: text features, sets 3
Writing meaningful text: text features, set 5
within the Writing Learning Progressions Frameworks.
Read more about the Learning Progressions Frameworks.
Answers/responses: 
 

Y4 (10/1998)

Y8 (09/1998)

Line form: (follows poetical conventions)
consistently
mostly
sometimes
not at all
Personal specialness conveyed:
extremely strong
quite strong
some glimpses
very little or none
Clarity and coherence:
very good
good
moderate
low
Appeal to wider audience:
(appropriate to share, read aloud):
excellent
very good
good
low

 
30%
32%
23%
15%
 
15%
36%
41%
8%
 
17%
51%
27%
5%
 
 
5%
18%
44%
33%

 
59%
26%
9%
6%
 
40%
33%
23%
4%
 
43%
45%
11%
1%
 
 
20%
32%
31%
17%
 
Commentary: Many year 4 and year 8 students produced a response in poetic form, but about 25% more year 8 than year 4 students performed at a high level on each aspect that was judged.
 
 
Examples 
 

High range

When I wish, I wish that people would care more about nature.
When I dream, I dream about my own beautiful arabian horse
When I cry, I am crying about all the sadness in the world.
When I laugh I am laughing at all the jokes I've been told.
When I think, I think about everything under the stars.
When I talk, I am saying my thoughts aloud.
While I breathe I'm alive.
While I'm alive, I'm me. (YEAR 8)

I'm never happy
says my pappy
I'm always sad
says my dad
I'm Just like tom
says my mom
but when I go into
my room ...
I giggle, I laugh, I yell,
I groom my cat who
gets into a spat
and thats
me (YEAR 4)
 

Mid range

I think cool thoughts
I feel awsome feelings
I dream fantastic dreams
I Hope wonderful things (YEAR 8)

I'm called Charuka,
I'm 12 years old,
I can change my mood,
Into different, different thoughts.
I feel happy when I get to see my friends,
I feel happy when play video games,
But I hate my world turing into a mess,
because it gives me misery! (YEAR 8)

I think eerting [exciting] things
I feel goey things
I dream special things
And I hops
rely good
things (YEAR 4)

poor old me up in a tree
thinking about poor old me.
mum call come and get a
Ice cream. happy old me sitting
in a tree (YEAR 4)

I like flowers and cats
also I like houres
I Like Reading riting
playing I like school
I feel happy when Im at scool. (YEAR 4)

I think school is cool.
I feel boured.
I dream that I can met my great
Grandad.
I hope It dose not rain afterschoolall
the time. (YEAR 4)